by Jemma Jun 16, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Breathing used to be so easy |
by Samantha
I like your style. My only problem with the poem is it seems that you start repeating the phrase "stolen water" too much near the end. Yes, I realize it's not a long poem, but I think a few less of the "stolen water" lines would go a long way to making the poem stellar. It's already awesome. :) |
by ajda
Very nice.....i understand what you mean by stolen water....I never really looked at life that way...not a bad poem. |