by Sean Allen
"For so long I hve been hurt and kicked around." |
by PygmyPuff
Its a good start, but it needs some cleaning up. It seems more like a cry for attention, you should try and add some metaphoric comparisons...Describe the feeling and the vibes when you have the gun in your hand... |
by Kayd
I like this one, though you've mispelt Bled in the third last line, and you might want to remove the second 'e'. Other than that, amazing! |