Its really good, the only thing you can do to improve it would be to even out the stanzas. Some are really deep adn long and thick, while others are just "there". {5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

Great use of words, even though I didn't understand all of it lol. Wonderful Job

I really liked this one...Very strong and different from a lot of poems you read. I'm not much into your format/flow of writing though..

xDarkSuicidex 5.5