Lust Over Love

by BlueEyedMystery   Jun 17, 2006


I trusted you when you told me you cared,
I really believed you would always be there,
But now you're leaving me behind,
This is my death certificate you have signed.

For tonight is my last night,
I will push the razor down with all my might,
But there are some things I need to tell you,
Before my time on this earth is through.

I love you and always will,
But my heart you have killed,
You have chosen lust over love,
But who am I to judge?

My time on this earth is almost up,
The blood is dripping from this deep cut,
I have one more thing to say before i'm free,
What ever you do, please remember me.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Infernus

    Even though there are hundreds of suicide poems on this site (of which ive read a dozen) I would say this one sticks out best to me because of the last line
    "whatever you do, please remember me"
    because I belive that's a driving force behind a lot human actions. The want to be remembered.

  • 17 years ago

    by ALEX

    This is good. Some of the lines were a little forced-sounding, and you should watch your rhyming, but it was a really great poem to show like, emotion.

  • 17 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    This is another really good poem... loved it...

    well i would like to edit a part...

    well you wrote:

    "My time on this earth is almost up,
    The blood is dripping from this deep cut,"

    i was thinnking maybe you could change it to:

    "My time on this earth is almost up,
    The blood is dripping from the cut,"

    i think it would flow better that way... idk... but overall i loved the whole poem and all ur ideas... keep it up always

  • 18 years ago

    by not a poet

    Ok i am not sure, but i think you wanna say "threw" instead of "through" and also i am not sure but i think whatever is one word? i am not too sure tho!
    great poem tho!
    keep it up!

  • 18 years ago

    by ShadowDancer

    Your rhyming was very well done in this poem. it all flowed exellently, and you chose a rather tricky rhyming style.

    the last stanza was the one thats stayed in my mind. very haunting

    Ruby

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