Now this is serious poetry. And, I loved it hun. It had really good flow to it. You chose GREAT wording! I actually wish I could write something like this. It was perfect! Keep it up! 5/5 =P

`Taleee. xx.

"Though one lay alone that night,"
I thought it was confusing to use 'one' in this case, it seemed like an unreferenced pronoun.
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I couldn't tell which aspects of this poem was a story and which aspects where to be metaphorical. As a story poem, it succeeds in creating a haunting tale of loss... But metaphorically I am unsure about the meaning. Maybe something about silence, or words left unsaid?

Gr8 poem
"The poet knows what i do not"
that got me thinking. cool that the ending is mistorys. it has a good rythme:)

This is super! The way you write is out of this world, excellent message and so true! This is my favourite of your poems

Sondos

I love this stuff, i like how deep you write. this poem makes you think, andnot many i read actually do that anymore. keep it up