Comments : Our Story

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    I had no idea what pash meant.. apparently it is australian for french kissing... boy, I had to look that one up.

    You could call it something simple, like
    "Our Poem"
    or
    "Our Story"
    or
    "How We Came to Be"
    or
    "The Two of Us"

    meh, whatever you'd like. I personally like simple titles for love poems.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    This, i felt was kind of like a story.. more than a poem.. the idea and emotions were still clear though.. maybe work on the flow, and try and make it into more a poem.. 3/5 p.s. thank you for volunteering to be in my club! :D i really appreciate it!

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Oh, yea.. forgot the title :P um.. sean's suggestions look good!