Freedom Bell

by Kaylee   Jun 18, 2006


Upon a poem should I not see,
A portal deep within the soul,
Caged bird unclip your wing,
Freedom! A bell does chime,

A Maiden dies upon the rock,
Though Ship had not returned,
Clutched within Death's hand,
Her final poetic verse,

Unfinished! Amatuer assumed.
That it had not a metaphor,
But a poet shakes their head,
It captured an unlived love,

Until a bird does take flight,
Scratch ink onto your paper,
Discourage an untrained eye,
Burning a poet's bridge,

Freedom! A bell does chime.
Unlock the voice you caged.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    I hope this makes up for the 2 comments I left that didn't seem very helpful.

    Re-reading this poem, I felt something totally different. Also looking at the previous two, you write about almost the same thing, from different views. A caged bird in the last, and here again. It takes me a while to notice these things. Lol

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Last two lines, WOW. Again, This was soooo good! I just loved the way you worded it. Honestly, It was great hun. Your flow was great, as per usual. Just a fantastic piece all over all. *nods head* Keep it up! =D 5/5

    `Taleee. xx.

  • 18 years ago

    by Sondos

    I enjoyed reading this and feel it is very well written, well structured with that style of yours that i just love

    Sondos

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    Very nice poem. I really enjoyed it :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "Freedom! A bell does chime.
    Unlock the voice you caged."

    Through this parallel construction, I would assume that the aforementioned bird is the 'voice', most likely not the literal voice but the personal or mental voice. I'll confess that certain aspects of the poem were beyond me as far as understanding your intended meaning. For example, the meaning behind the mention of the Maiden and her 'Ship' is beyond me. I would have assumed either a mythological reference or a metaphorical one, as if Maiden represented something Muse-like, and 'Ship' something connected to romance or homecoming (or lack thereof). The third stanza seemed like a critique of poor readers to me, and the fourth seemed like a call to poets to continue their calling. Meh, we'll see how well I did. If you want, I'd like a PM on some of the things I talked about, and maybe some of your views on your own poem. Thanks.

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