Whisper

by RetroRavey   Jun 18, 2006


There's a cold hand on my shoulder,
and a whisper in my ear.
There's a dark and shadowed Ravyn,
drawing ever near.

My soul is growing darker,
cluttered by the thoughts.
The truth has fallen to silence,
and the secrets that I wrought.

I'm sick of all these whispers,
they crowd all around,
and when they get to screaming,
I fall to the snowy ground.

I fall into the darkness.
that has always been in my heart.
But it overwhelms me,
more than I would dare to know.

So keep to quiet whispers,
and secret sounds inside my ear.
And I'll hear all of your whispers,
though I cannot see if you are here.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Ariana

    Apart from the break in rhyme in your third stanza i thought this all flowed well. i really like the words you use because they were different. I also liked the imagery you create because i found it easy to visualise what you are writing about. Nice work :) :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Mousie

    That was really good! In some parts i got confused, but i just reread them and got them... haha i tend to do that sometimes, i get distracted and i'm like "huh!?!?" but yeah... so thanks for all those comments... keep checking for some new stuff and i'll check out yours too!

  • 18 years ago

    by Wasted Fake Smiles

    Wow. excellent work yet again. u have a git that is for sure.

  • 18 years ago

    by Poetess Lana

    Her fave Evanescence song is Whisper... great poem dearie!!! 5/5 and its spelled allanah...

  • 18 years ago

    by Avrii Monrielle

    Hi :) Taking Over Me actually was for Alannah's (sp) contest. My fave Evanescence song is Imaginary. Is urs "Taking Over Me"?

    this poem is haunting my head lol... very powerful!