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Very nice descriptive language, metaphors, similes and all that. The poem was specific and detailed, and of course very emotion-filled. Excellent write.

Great piece with some fantastic language usage and some good descriptions. The content is very clear and well conveyed

The world seemed to stop turning
And time appeared to freeze.
How could this have happened?
It was like an awful scheme.
((Bad, bad rhyming here... Sorry to be blunt, but I'll just be honest.))

Otherwise, a very sad poem. I'm sorry to hear of your loss. I hope everything is ok.

Now, I liked this poem, but it isn't your best. I realize it is harder to write about people (at least for me) and you did a nice job. Other than that one part explain above, it had a nice flow to it. Good job.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5