I liked 'Being my girl was her desinty' Sounds cute lol

But as for the poem, I really liked it. You did really good on the rhyming aswell. It didn't seem off to me. But I dunno if it should be in this section or the love section. It's like a bit of both?

Really good poem though. It was..interesting. 5/5 =)

`Taleee. xx.

I prefer, the line you already have, i don't the girl thing makes it sound a bit tacky and that's beneath you. Just my voews

I love this poem and words are so beautifully put togethor. About a section, i'd say stick it in the love section but honestly this is a poem to be proud of.
Sondos

This is an enchanting write. I loved the imagery and the lines
"So I stole a spark of sacred fire;
spun myself a sanctimonious spell."
Those lines really touched a darker part of love, one that would do anything.

I think that the last line you have now is a perfect ending. As Sondos mentionned, the other makes it seem tacky. I also think this should stay in the love section. It shows love in a different slant than most poems and that, itself, makes the poem intruging.

A beautiful poem with beautiful penmenship. Well done!

I love sonnets, just the fact that one can make a poem of 10 syllables every line,well, gotta be a good writer to do it, love the poem
but, isn't a sonnet supposed to be only 14 lines?

Line already for sure.

Aken Sol

Wow.. that was a little dark.. hehe.. i think you should maybe put it in the dark section.. because although it is about love, it is a little scary.. lol.. great write though! the emotion was clear and i like your "sean-ian sonnet".. and finally, i liked the second last line better as i felt it was more simple.. short & sweet.. 5/5

Absutely amazing.. i reli liked the words u put in.. ur 3rd stanza i think was the best.. gave the poem an obsessive feel.. i think u shud put it in dark poems.. tho its bout love, but thats not the first thing that comes to mind when i think "love poems".. (i think it shud be put in its own category :P) jk.. i also like the part where u included the title.. it was very powerful, too..

the way u ended it is better than the alternate.. the other one sounds clichéd.. and doesnt match with the words in the poem..

keep up the talent
take care
NannO

Amazing poem.
very touching and deep.
i like the line you already have better.
the one wbout the girl was a bit tacky.
but that's just my opinion.
very pwerful and meaningful.
keep up the beautiful work.
yours truly,
meg.

I like the line you have used. As for where to put it. Leave it where it is. It portrays a dark kind of wanting and desire to do whatever it takes to get it. Very well written.

Being my girl was her destiny is much better...the other one made me have to reread it to make sure it was right i don't think you should put him her and out of know where will....just a thought...otherwise i think it's kayoot and yet deep and shit...i liked it..

In my opinion you need not make changes, this poem is wonderful just as you have written it. I would also like to add, if I may, that the line "that far surpassing Will is Destiny" has a much greater (and lovely) effect than "that being my girl was her destiny".
Again, well done. 5 from me. ^^