Attack of own Mental Insanity

by Unforgiven Retniap doolb   Jun 20, 2006


My eyes cross,
as I try to concentrate,
head pounding and throbbing,
the Advil is too late.

Hands start to shake,
blood pumping too fast,
praying and hoping,
this attack won't last.

Soon tears begin to fall,
as my body starts to tremble,
breath nearly stops,
as this world begins to crumble.

The attack is getting stronger,
can barely write this line,
blackout is coming next,
so I'm praying I'll wake up fine.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Ashes of a Black Rose aka Night Child

    Dang, thats kind of a scary position to be in. hope all is well. anyways, good job! like the person above me said, good detail, it really paints a picture in my mind. once again, awesome poem!

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Wow - for starters, this poem held SO much detail. I could completely picture every little peice of writing you wrote. It was really good.
    Your rhyming worked out really well until the second to last stanza - 'crumble' and 'tremble' don`t rhyme, so that messed me up a bit. But, thats okay, because your flow was perfect. =D
    Great job, I`ve enjoyed reading your poetry. 5/5

    Samantha Hollywood

  • 18 years ago

    by Nelle

    Awwww...so sad but i can relate to this! it was full of emotions, and your feelings really came out! great job 5/5

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