Awwww...so sad but i can relate to this! it was full of emotions, and your feelings really came out! great job 5/5

Wow - for starters, this poem held SO much detail. I could completely picture every little peice of writing you wrote. It was really good.
Your rhyming worked out really well until the second to last stanza - 'crumble' and 'tremble' don`t rhyme, so that messed me up a bit. But, thats okay, because your flow was perfect. =D
Great job, I`ve enjoyed reading your poetry. 5/5

Samantha Hollywood

Dang, thats kind of a scary position to be in. hope all is well. anyways, good job! like the person above me said, good detail, it really paints a picture in my mind. once again, awesome poem!