Faded

Good poem! thanks for the comment... but it wasn't my sister who died in the car accident... it was my friends...one of them died in the car accident.
~rhi

"Some make fun others back away"

I didn't understand this line at first, maybe put a comma between "fun" and "others" it would make it flow better.

Also "Deserted by chose" It should be choice:)

Other than that, great poem, i loved the story of it and I'm sure a lot of people on this site can relate to everything said in this, I know i can. I liked the rhymes, they were subtle, but they were there. Great work.

--Steph

That was an alright poem. My only suggestion is you should use punctuation. "Commas, periods, colons etc." It messed up the flow at times.

"Some make fun others back away"
[You would need to add a 'comma' after "fun" so people would pause]

Anyways was a good poem.

Juls -
Great job! The first stanza rhymes kind of confused me, as you rhymed "away" with "away" but also threw "way" in there, so the other line was kind of excluded. A bit confusing.
But otherwise, great job. The flow was great, 5/5

Samantha Hollywood

This is really sad---I also had the same question as .x.Natalie.x. I kindof thought that the ''chose''was supposed to be ''choice'' Everythime I reached that stanza I read choice because thats what sounds right. Beside that it flows very smoothly. You have a lot of talent! 5/5 stay strong--