Ooh thts so sad! but i know how u feel..i wish everynite on stars! but they never come true...

Good poem , good way to express those feelings; easy to relate to
well done
keep it up :)

Awww.. that was so sad.. it is so true though and i am sure so many people can relate.. the emotion is strong and the flow is good.. in the last stanza "anymore" doesn't really rhyme with "know" though..

And hear the wolves call.
^ here you can say "calls" because that does make sense and then it will rhyme better..

I wish on a shinning star,
That you would come back,
^ it should be "wished" not "wish"

AND

it should be "shining" not "shinning"

great poem! really enjoyed reading it! 5/5

The only think I found wrong in this poem, Was the flow of the last stanza. It just felt abit rocky. But apart from that, I thought you did great on it. And I really liked the first stanza. Great job! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

I liked the first three stanzas more than the last two, simple because the first three were filled with specific descriptions and personal details, whereas the last two were sort of more general and emotional. In the end, it didn't matter all that much, you have to end someway, but I think that the poem could be improved if you add more descriptive details. I enjoyed the rhyming and thought the rhythm was well done.

Great poem! Deep----nice work 5/5

Awe... that's such a sweet yet sad poem. Nicely done... good flow and rhyme... 5/5

Sounds so true

kazza

Awww, i loved it! it was perfect, there isn't a thing i would change! great job 5/5

Aww.. that is so sad. I can definitely relate to this. you did a great job on writing this though. Great job

Omg. i defiantly love this poem and can relate! i am going through this right now. all over this. thank you for writing this, its amazing. keep it up 5/5

Lost love is always hard and never fun to go through. Good poem.

Awww. That was sad. Really goog though.

I liked how you said you wished on a star. It was cool.

Again, I don't see anything that needs to be changed in this. It was a great write! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Hey i kinda like this poem. ive been in love but ive never had my heart broken so it makes your poem interesting to read. hang in there.
[Theo]

I loved the first stanza, in parcitularly the last line. the third stanza was also very clever, with ech line beginning the same.
i very well written piece

Ruby

Aww... this was so very sad...
some how i can feel what the writter is feeling... i can feel every pain... ...

its because you have written it so well

I think this poems really good.