by χ-Ñ.ι.α-χ Jun 20, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
Once upon a rainy night, all the emotions inside me began to fight. |
by Jessica
Aww.. that was sad but also very good! the emotion was so strong, the flow was good, and i liked the few rhymes there were! the descriptions and language you used really added affect.. and i love the repitition of "I just couldnt help but feel it." you just have to be careful with tenses, there were a few times where you switched from past to present.. great write though! 5/5 |