by Nelle Jun 20, 2006
category :
Friendship, family /
other
I wish i didn't hurt you |
by Little Dot
Good poem. I thought you did a really good job. Keep it up. |
by Jessica
I didn't really understand this.. i found that it did not really make sense.. it was sweet though.. |
by Darien
I thought it was a throw off having the 2nd verse only have 3 lines, while the rest had 4. You need to add a line to it. Maybe add at the end of it "Maybe you should leave" |
I think this poem had good content, such as wording and vocabulary. But some of your lines ran short, and some ran long, so I would suggest going through it again and making it a little more clear for the reader. I also think that on your second stanza, you should consider adding another line, maybe a rhyming one. I don`t really understand why all of your stanzas had for lines, but this one had three. |