Wow.. another awesome poem by youu! its strange, but your poems just seem to relax me.. they actually take away stress as i read.. its always comforting to know that i can read one of your new poems! this was great, it said what you wanted to say without totally giving it away.. it was mysterious but most people who have been through that situation will understand.. it flowed well and the descriptions were as usual worded perfectly! great job! 5/5

"The tears from my eyes are now crying dry,"
I'm not sure what that's supposed to mean. It sounds really cool, but the meaning of the sentence as it stands right now is that the tears are crying.. and the manner in which your tears are crying is dry... and I just have no idea what in the world that means...
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Sounds like the narrator stopped cutting for a while, but slipped back into the habit and lied about it, but wants help from someone the narrator lied to at first.

Wow this is really good! You vented very well lol. Keep it up.

Great flow, powerful emotions

Wow.. a very deep poem.. if you need to talk to me go ahead, alright? Good job..

I begged and I pleaded down on my knees,
I wanted the help but you couldn't see.
I have tried to pretend that I am fine,
But roll up my sleeve, you will see the signs.

That bit of the poem is my favourite! I can totally relate and I hope you will get through everything! You can always talk to me on MSN...

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I thought this poem was pretty good! I got the drift that you were trying to get across! Please return the favor as said in the forum!

Wow.. that really blew me away. It flowed very well and I love the way that you worded it. My favorite stanza would have to be the first, I can definitely relate to that. I also like the way that you ended it. You did a great job on this. I give it a 5/5

Wow, this was a really good poem. Yeah, I tend to write down a lot of stuff when I need to vent too. This one turned out great!

Deeply emotinal and very well writen you had me hanging on every word it was awesome well done

Wow! I loved it! There was so much emotion in it. It flowed nicely. I can also really relate to this poem as well. Great job!

Hey darling~

"The tears from my eyes are now crying dry,"

i think i can really relate to ^that^ line... actually, i can pretty much relate to the whole poem. =/ ...but that line, just really stood out to me.

to me, it's like... you're crying. you NEED to cry. you WANT to cry. but it's like the tears refuse to come out... there's none left because you've cried so much.

i dunno, it may be different to you..

anyways, i really like this. i just don't like how sad you seem to be.. =/

i'm here for you, Nat. i really am.

*hugs*

E> you loads.

Amazing poem-loved the rhyme in it!!! definately 5/5 keep writing! you've got loads of talent

Nicely done... powerful and emotional. I especially like the line "The tears from my eyes are now crying dry,"... creative and powerful. You may think you've lost control in life, but you should realize the talent you have... such as writings like this. 5/5

Great job loved the poem this one her ei think should defnitly be set to music loved it great rhyme and flow from begining to endthanks for shareing it

I'm sorry I can't give you a really good comment on this bu I haven't been myself recently. I just wanted to let you know that I read it and I know what you mean by, "Losing control."

I have tried to pretend that I am fine,
But roll up my sleeve, you will see the signs.
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aw how I adore this part!
very beautifully written!
I love this poem its very great overall

I can understand how this feels like, even thou we have to continue living this life and not give up!
I like your last stanza it was a good ending, with an open ended question!
great job hun!

Keep it up And good luck
Yours
NemO x0x0x0x0x0x

I loved the last stanza, I feel like that most of the time. I want to be what I used to be, but it seems impossible... since that's just the past.

Good job!

XoXo
Gaby

Some of my best poems were me just venting, and they turned out really good. This one's the same. Not my favorite of yours, but still really good.

Ravyn

Thats is awesome...maybe some might not understand cause not everyone live a life so dead....but that was really good....