by Jen Jun 20, 2006
category :
Friendship, family /
broken friendship
This is my greatest fear, the end of our friendship is here.... |
I think the rhyming worked out well, but you should really consider reformatting this poem into stanzas. It makes it a lot easier for the reader to better interpret what you`re trying to say. I also think that you can think of some better similies and metaphors to use throughout this poem. Overall, 3/5. |