Why do i need him?
he doesn`t need me.
[Capital the i and the h in he]
hes off on his own.
with out me.
[He's off on his own
Without me.]
it doesn`t make since.
[It doesn't make sense.]
till i herd of her.
[Til I heard of her.]
YOu should go into more detail about why this or why that is happening in your poem. Addig some emotional stuff til will help a reader relate to the poem. Free verse doesn't always have to be I this or I that. Most poems here are free verse whether they rhyme or not. If it doens't have a specific syllable count or rhyming structure it's free verse.

I completely agree with binks...It's good, but needs a little bit more detail...Good try tho! 4/4

I like this one alot, can relate to those feelings easely, well, yuo wrote so that relating it was easy :), it's a good poem
keep it up :)

I though that was a fair poem.. it didn't really have much emotion.. although, the flow was good.. i think if you add in more of how you feel about it then it will be better.. and maybe use better descriptive words..

Tt doesn`t make sense.
^ should be "It" not "Tt"

Till i herd of her.
^ should be "heard" not "herd"

We didn`t even have a thing.
^ dont use the word "thing", try and use another word as this is far too random and not a very poetic word..

nice try though! ill give it a 3/5 :)

I thought this was oooookay! There just seemed to be something missing........I dunno! Sorry1

FOr a free verse..not bad! I liked how you just spit out what you were feeling and didn't hold back! nicely said..well written!
-Krissey!

This is an honest poem, it says what you really think and what you really want. It's also well written and clear.

XoXo
Gaby

I like free verse for some reason.
There is so limits to it sort of thing.
But I liked your poem right here!
I like this because I'm going through this right now hehe.
And a poem that people can relate to is a good one!