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This is so much better - its a truly amazing poem :) the grammar's still not perfect, but i feel like you're saying this, not typing it now . . beautiful, touching writing! i'm very sorry about your sister if this is true- hope she gets better

Ok, first of all i hate it when poems are written with words not spelled out, like u instead of you, etc. also, saying dis instead of this is kind of tacky . . if it has some meaning to you, like it represents you or where you're from or something then thats cool, i just dont think it adds much to poetry. also, you should be you're in the line about causing more and more strife - i wasnt sure if you knew that or mean to abbreviate it. the ideas behind the poem are really deep - once you get past the spelling its really touching. hope my suggestions help - i really think people appreciate a poem more when it doesnt look like a text message.

U described ur-self to the world and that takes guts. Keep writing ur doing great!! :P

I Absolutly Loved It.. Your wordz and The Emotionz were Soo well Put and Just Really enjoyed Reading It.. And If This Is True, I Am Sooo Sorry!!!!
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Luv Hanz xx 5/5

That was so so so good its amzing