Wow. is all i can say really.. every poem you write just leaves me speechless! this was so metaphorical and amazing.. i loved how you repeated the words "out of the blue" i felt they really added flavor to the poem.. i also like the idea that she sculpted you as if you were a work of art.. this is a very original idea.. loved it! 5/5

3 in one day is just redic

Beautiful job, my favorite was the 5th stanza.

Judging lyrics compared to poetry is so hard, because I could never figure out the rythym you have in your head. I wouldn't know if the syllables were all in tact. So my critique is,

"But then out of the blue"
[I didn't see much need for the word 'then']

"for anything I knew that I wanted--
for all that I could ever need..."
[Didn't see much need for the word 'that' in either line]

But you never know, it may sound great in a song. Haha, awesome stuff.

Out of curiousity, do you sing or play an instrument?

Fantastic, hunny. I like the change in the chorus, that fits perfectly into the synchronisation that I imagined the tune to be (sorry.. lol).. Very subtle. It left me wanting to hear it as you intended when you wrote it.. Well done. xx