Comments : Does This Darkness Have A Name?

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Wow.
    My favourite part about this poem was the questions near the end and at the end. Really made you think about the storey line and the last line referred to the title which showed its importance. Well done daaaaaaaahling :]
    Twas a interesting poem with a storey.x

  • 17 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow, so much emotion throughout awesome write. I loved it. I liked the questions at the end as well. The flow was really good too.

    Ciao, Joe

  • 17 years ago

    by Carmen

    This is very heartfelt and full of emotion. i loved it, but i've found two mistakes:

    in this stanza: {He woke up that one morning
    With a different perspective on life
    It wasn't a good one, either
    Filled with anger, rage and strife} the word strife does fit in teh rhyming scheme, but ti has nothing to to with anger and rage. strife is like, surviving. you should change it to "a need to strife" or a "want to strife".

    and teh second:{What causes all these nightmares?
    What causes all this pain?
    Can you answers all our questions?
    Does this darkness have a name?} you said in the third line "Can you ANSWERS..." it should be can you answer (no S)

    otherwise, great job. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Wow, excellent job. It had great transitions and emotions that kept me reading on and on. Very sad topic. Keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Wow...
    This has to be one of my favourites on the site.
    I loved how you made the reader aware that there is always reasons for somebody's actions, and i loved the last stanza inmeensely.
    This was a great write.
    A very well deserving 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    This is a sad poem,so very well written,I teared. Darkness does have a name Evil,Sin and Pride.
    Great poem

  • 17 years ago

    by ellewen

    Again excellent!!! I am amazed every time. So you are a one tree hill fan?? I used to watch that!! But then there were some other shows opposite of it and i stopped watching. So does this mean you watch the cw, or wb channel with gilmore girls, veronica mars, and all that good stuff lol??? I love meeting gilmore girl fans, and I was just wondering. I have been watching every tuesday with my mom since i was like 7 which is half my life,litterally. ~ Oh sorry I know im supposed to be commenting your poem! Dont get the wrong Idea, I LOVE your poem too, but I also love thta you were inspired by one of my favorite shows. You know that is a great idea- to get ideas from shows. I usually take my own expieriences, but I have never really thought about using the dramatic lives of fictional characters. Thats great and now you have inspired me! lol Kepp up your awesome work!

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Great poem
    very nicely written
    keep up the great job
    i will be back to read more by you cause they are great.

  • 17 years ago

    by kelS;

    Omg.
    at first i wasn`t going to read this poem because it looked way to long to read. but i am so glad i did. that one tree hill eposide was so sad. i barly could handle it. and school shootings are so depressing. i would have to say this is one of my fav's on this website. good job if i could i`d give you a 6/5 but i can`t so 5/5. great job. i`m adding you on my favs list for this poem. AMAZING JOB!

  • 17 years ago

    by Kayla

    Hey i love this poem its so sad but its also true which makes me more sad that people can be so mean to others and not care about the consequences. the flow is very good and i wouldnt have changed a thing 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by tiffany

    Good job. this has a nice point to it and it makes me think a little bit.

    x3Tiffie

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Wow, another great one, great job....5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Oscar

    Incredible, you really captured my interest (except with the one tree hill part at the beginning, not a fan) but going on this poem was very good, it flowed well and i liked the rhyming, it didn't seem forced at all.

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Dark Kitten

    Beautifully written, the words just seem to flow from the page! I kind of like how you write things from books and series, and make them into a poem. I have no criticism for this either. =D

  • 17 years ago

    by disturbed one

    Wow..that was complete amazing...definitely not what i expected when i clicked onto this poem...

    This is my fave part

    All he wanted was understanding
    For someone to be in his shoes
    Someone to stick up for him
    Or notice his latest bruise

    Would you say he was a monster?
    Or is he a victim in disguise?
    Did he deserve to be ignored all this time?
    Couldn't anyone have heard his cries?

    I can soo relate to that...except...i didnt turn to violence lol

    Great write...5/5 yet again

  • 17 years ago

    by Xx Eternal Fantasy xX

    I think this was great. You really did a great job. This poem was filled with emotion and sadness. Well written. Keep up the good work. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    This poem is so emotional and wonderful! I love how you base poems off of pop culture. Great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow this is by far me favorite one out of the titles that you gave me. Its hard to know what someone is going through and how much more they can take. I do not belive that bulling should be allowed at all yet it takes place so many times.. However I aslo dont belive that the answer to this is shooting people but talking it over. But when no one notices you and no one cares its hard to see any other options.

  • 17 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    I like this write. i had a freind end his life at school.
    so i can relate to this poem alot. (:

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Amazing poem, almost perfectly written. It's true what you're saying about the darkness in people...
    Excellent piece, 5/5.