The wrong kind of love

by Green M&M   Jun 21, 2006


Thinking of you made my heart swell with joy,
hoping we would last not knowing I'm a toy,
we would flirt and hang out,
nothing in my mind would make me doubt,
we were meant to be together,
our love would last forever,
you said you liked me but I knew there's was more to it,
something wasn't right something just didn't fit,
all you wanted was a booty call,
now I know I can't leave this endless hall,
you were fun at first,
but there is so much I need to say I just might burst,
I guess it's just the wrong kind of love.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Mousie

    This was good but again, the flow was off, it was just some lines were longer than others, didn't flow as nicely... also it was kind of generic, but it shows what you were feeling which is a good start, good job

  • 18 years ago

    by Krissey

    I think the flow could have been a bit better to this...ONly because its a pet peeve of mine to read a line with like four words then a line with 8..sorry I'm weird like that lol...anyways...over all way to express your feelings it was a good poem!!
    -Krissey

    P.S Could you read Some Kids dont play please?

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    Good poem, I like how the last line wasn't part of a rhyme, that gave it a strong ending feel. I thought the rhythm was a bit wishy-washy in a few places, though in others it was really strong.

  • 18 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    Great poem-tons of emotion-well written 5/5 keep writing!

  • 18 years ago

    by johnnys_princess

    Aside the few speeling errors this was a good poem, could have extended more on your feelings a little to create more empathy to the reader good effort lynne

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