This poem is sad but the reader'll get distracted by the grammar errors in the poem such as run on sentences, lower case I's, and your when you mean you're. Just try and fix those and let the reader enjoy the poem :)

Wow I really enjoyed reading that. The rhyme and rhythem were really good. There was a lot of emotion. Good job!

Great poem! Really sad but good 5/5

Very moving, and clever that it doesnt quite click till later on what the poems about. Congrats.

I really enjoyed reading this, your a great poet. keep it up.

This is a really sad poem... I'm sorry about your loss. Only thing I'll comment is "you're memory" should be "your memory", otherwise, great write. 5/5

"and i know you're memory will always live on."
'your' not 'you're'
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Good poem, nice use of rhymed couplets, the rhyming never got in the way of the story of the poem, which was very sad and touching.

Good poem, you can try adding more imagery

I loved the last two lines, they're so true. When someone's gone, that person is still there for you because you still can remember how everything used to be.

Good job!

XoXo
Gaby

Realyl sad but amazingly written good job i loved it and thanks for the comments i hope to hear from ya in the future =)

Awww!! this was so sad, but so sweet! adorable poem, i truly loved it.. it is an excellent tribute to your little brother if this is true.. very nicely done.. always treasure your memories and keep him close in your heart! 5/5

Wow soo sad and really sweet, the emotion i really felt it

kazza

I liked the poem. Very expressive emotional language. And also it's really sad and very enjoyable to read.