Awww...that was sweet. The rhyming was good. I didn't think it flowed to well in some places though, it didn't really take away from the great message you are trying to say though. I really loved it!

Awww.. great, you've made me all emotional now.. hehe.. this was so sweet.. it flowed okay, the descriptions were pretty good.. but what really touched me was the love that just seemed to flow from within it.. excellent write.. 5/5

I thought that was an amazing poem.it was truely wonderful. I think it had a nice steady flow. Very sweet and wonderful. Loved it