Woah really good. i think there was only one part that either i read wrong or didnt quite flow. other than that, great work. keep it up! i can't wait to read some more.
Much love,
Tammie xoxo

Awsome poem, it took me back to when my boyfriend and i broke up so i could relate to the poem.
i hope you can write some happy poems :)
Steph

I like the way you have used that one line in every verse, but in different places. Another brilliant poem- well done.

thanks for the comment- can you just PM me and tell me which word is spelt wrong because my spelling is awful!

keep writing!

xoxoxoxoxoxox

Man that sad. 5/5
-Vino