This is really beautiful

Heh. So this is what they mean by poetry in prose. This is really heart-wrenching. I don't know if it's personal experience that led you to write this but, I just wanted to say that I feel like that too sometimes. Anyways, keep it up. I look foward to seeing more of your works soon.

Aken Sol

Wow, this is absolutely heartbreaking. Sadly, there are countless people who can relate to this.
I can offer no critique at all, but I will say that your opening line in this is brilliant!
Take care and keep it up~Holly

Awwww how sad! i really liked this though! it had so much emotion that i could sence. it was amazing. i loved everything about this. 58475345/5

Short, but a very tranquil and sad poem.

I liked it a lot. Very poetic. Keep writing.

Aww...this has so much emotion in it...i truly loved it...5/5...congrats on getting 3rd place in my contest...keep up the good work.