Wow, this poem was just amazing. I could feel and hear your emotions running through the words. Your descriptions are wonderful, and the general flow of everything together is great. I love how in the first stanza you compare life to a pair of hand cuffs, and then later on you actually get thrown into jail, or locked up somewhere. I really liked it. Great job =)

WOW... That was amazing. I loved the topic. The rhyming and flow were excellent! It was so vivd, I felt like I was in jail while reading it. I loved it!! Great job! 5/5

That was really good. The flow was awesome and I love poems that really get in the topic and tell the story well, and urs did just that. Keep it up.! 5/5

Ravyn

A very sad/haunting poem.

I thought the flow was great. And you used great wording in this. And you really kept my attention. As I was reading it, I was just wanting more and more. You've done great on it. Keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

I dunno what to say, very rarely am i lost for words. I thought this poem was absolutely amazing, it was sad, i guess, but you kept me wanting to read. I thought it was brilliant!!
5/5 defiantely
keep writing my friend
love Tara-Kay
*Beautifully poetic*

I don't know what t say exceot the metaphors were wisley chosen and the imagery, especially handcuffs and windows, were stand out and gave more depth to the poem where as everything was a bit natural rhyme wise.

SARAH!!! There's a huge storm here and it just knocked my computer out while I was reading this the first time around. The electricity went out and I really debated turning it back on, but I did. JUST FOR YOU! That...and I was too in love with the story line and the writing lol!! 'Nuff said!! LOVE IT! GTG BEFORE I GET HIT BY LIGHTENING!!!

WOW!!! this poem was excellent!! i could feel all the emotion and everything just flowed so well!! good job, you are a great poet.

Wow, this poem was amazing. I lovet it. You truly captured the essense of pain and how one sometimes feel like there isnt a person in this world who would ever understand. Great job. Keep it up ;)

Wow . . . hunni this was a powerful poem, so so so so so (and I could go on forever) touching. I loved how you tied your title into the end:

"I beg: Redemption for my mistake!
But no they are all dancing
As my bleeding heart still aches"

With huge mistakes like taking our own lives or small ones like little white lies, we all want redemption, and freedom from the bonds of it, from the rememberance of our wrong. This poem captured that feeling of regret so well, along with the feeling of almost contempt at people for not caring about others enough. A great poem.

-Tainted

That was beautiful...i loved it...I had a great flow..and was powerful...all around a great peice of work...
Emma 5/5

And my bloodied tears still fell
No body, No one cleaned my face
I was dirty, my past was filthy
As was this forsaken place

^^ I loved that stanza especially the last two lines, because everyone has a filthy past..theres always something in someones past they wish they've never done..and thats ok we are all human and make mistakes...as for the people who don't help you shame on them!! In times like that, thats when you should find your inner strength and just stand up and tell yourself you can get through this on your own! I loved this poem! Well done!
-Krissey

Great poem

Wow, a great poem. it is one of the best poem that i ever read. great job/5/5

Very awesome. I think a lot of people can relate to this really well. I can.

Nice job
it flowed pretty well and it had a lot of feeling/emotion
i liked it
~HazE

Wow..! this one really speaks all by itself. i loved it because the pain of a person having committed mistakes and begging redemption for it(as of course your title suggests) has been beautifully brought through. very good work. and thanks for your comments on mine. it really means a lot.

Somehow.. I don't know why... But this makes sense to me. Strange. But anyways.. good poem! you're a GREAT writer!

-Mandee

IT'S A GREAT POEM!

I will never be as good as you at writing poems and i wonder how you do it maybe you could email me someday and teach me how to well my SN is aintmyway and my email adress is aintmyway@aol.com or just aintmyway well ttyl maybe if you want to well G2G i loved the poem it made me feel my past and it did kinda hurt to remember those past memories but it was great well you are 1 of the best poets i have ever had the pleasure of meeting well online that is but who knows maybe we will meet in the future and talk but who knows well G2G bye