"Why can't we just try to except each other?"
^ except should 'accept'
I'd also try putting some punctuation like commas, colon, semi-colons, periods, etc. at the end of the sentences so that they don't all run into each other, but thats just my opinion =)
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I think this poem has a very good message and I agree. I often think about this as well.. "why is it like that?" It's so weird and pointless... But I like this poem. Great job!!
18 years ago
by Jordan
Good message, why can't the world just function without any problems?
Maybe the theme even stretches beyond the setting of just a school? We all do bad things whether we mean to or not...humans just can't seem to coincide in peace. Oh, bother....
I'm not going to point anything out, but there are a few grammatical errors in your poem that you should look into correcting, just for neatness' sake.