Good job sir, how dare someone give this poem a 1. It had a style that I liked very much. Good job

Rave

I thought it was pretty good. The rhyming and flow was off a bit though. I could tell you put a lot of emotion into this poem though. Overall gt was good!

This poem to me, is not really worth being rated a five or a four unfortunately but I thought I'd tell you some suggestions:
we stared in each others eyes
[Typical romantic cliche sadly. Everyone stares or gazes into their love's eyes. But what do they see. Sadness? A tint of a different eye color? etc]
and talked, told no lies
[Grammar error]
just you and me
[Is this supposed to be you and I?]
the way we kissed
[Well how did you? Was it sweet kiss, wet, tart, a goofy mess? etc]
You might want to add details using the five senses and some more emotionl stuff to really give it a feel that stands out.

I REALLYY LiKE ALL YOUR POEMz..i HOPE YOU CANN FiND A WAYY TO MOVE ON EN JUST MAKE DA BEST OF LiFE..