Where can I begin?
"Drunk again on cheap wine
it`s all too much to take
Torturing myself with
The drunken rememerance
Of us, a lover`s myth"

It doesn`t get any better than that my dear, this is one I will read over and over again, truly my new favorite, I am i

I am in awe of your beautiful talent...Love, Tim

I've never heard of a Monchielle before this one... You write the most beautiful formed poetry. Every stanza is incredible, flowed to next effortlessly. Really awesome work and thanks for teaching me another form of poetry!

I loved the title Holly, and te flow was spectacular, I cannot imagine anyone giving this anything but a 5. I loved it, Denise

Holly, you are truly among the best on this site.

the depth of emotions is woven deep into this piece of work and each line stands out.

great wor once again!
peace
shobhana

Excellent poem. I really enjoyed it. You are a very talented woman. 5/5 take care
Loretta

Oh yeah! i love the last stanza

Holly!! you never cease to amaze me with the power of your words and your ability to write on just about anything.

"the drunken remembrance
of us, a lover's myth"

these words are outstanding.

peace
shobhana

I loved formed poetry and you did a great job!

Wow. I love this poem. Very well done! It is very powerful. Finally a poem i have read today that leads somewhere.

The tone is written perfectly. It seems like the person feels absolutely hopeless.

IfI have any suggestion for you at all it would be the

Last stanza where you rhyme with "with". When you use with it breaks the rhythm of the poem because with carries the statement through to the next line. Just a suggestion haha

btw sorry its cut into two comments... im on a laptop and i accidentally touched the pad and it send it when i was halfway through writing it.

Great poem 5/5