Imaginary Friends

Hmm.... i always hated my imaginary friends this restores my hope for the young childs innocent mind

i thought this one was a little short and not detailed enough (which is the opposite of another one of yours) i was left wanting more of you descrption of this world it left me happy but not fulfilled more of a half empty rather than half full. i think it could have been enhanced with a bit of setting added to the boys world (the sun green grass etc.)

"Hiding up in his room
Mom and dad are at it again
All the yelling scares him

Curled up in the corner
He covers his ears
Going to his own little world

Everything there is perfect
Nobody yells or hits
He plays with his friends"

^ great amount of detail here (not to much to bore me but enough to open my senses to his surroundings)a very strong start

He wishes mommy could come here
She would love it too
She could meet Ed, Stan, and all the others

^ i like how you added names gives it a more 'real' effect how his friends have names it makes me believe in his "world"

If only they could escape together
No more dad there to hurt them
All they need is his imaginary friends

^beautiful ending sums it up nicely

Hmm.... i always hated my imaginary friends this restores my hope for the young childs innocent mind

i thought this one was a little short and not detailed enough (which is the opposite of another one of yours) i was left wanting more of you descrption of this world it left me happy but not fulfilled more of a half empty rather than half full. i think it could have been enhanced with a bit of setting added to the boys world (the sun green grass etc.)

"Hiding up in his room
Mom and dad are at it again
All the yelling scares him

Curled up in the corner
He covers his ears
Going to his own little world

Everything there is perfect
Nobody yells or hits
He plays with his friends"

^ great amount of detail here (not to much to bore me but enough to open my senses to his surroundings)a very strong start

He wishes mommy could come here
She would love it too
She could meet Ed, Stan, and all the others

^ i like how you added names gives it a more 'real' effect how his friends have names it makes me believe in his "world"

If only they could escape together
No more dad there to hurt them
All they need is his imaginary friends

^beautiful ending sums it up nicely

You commented on my "The way it can go" poem, which is fictional yet not since that happens everyday as you said.

I thought this poem was nothing short of great, I really enjoy how you somehow manage to bring a person to feel for the (hopefully) fictional person you're writing about in this perticular poem, when reading it, I more or less saw it before my eyes, I could picture it so well, amazing work, that is good poetry in my eyes, something that actually makes people think and feel, not just words scribbled down to look good.

Amazing, please keep it up
/Bluey

This is extremely sad...I don't think its wrong for a child to have imaginary friends because we all have had them, its normal, but its sad a child is so mistreated that the only friends he has are his imaginary ones...breaks my heart! I like how you wrote this...different from other poems I've read! Glad I picked this to read!
-Krissey

I remember having an imaginary friend when I was a kid. It was a girl my age, and we would talk all the time. She was my first girlfriend, hehe.
Yeah, I was a sad little kid! lol

Great poem, a really unique topic to write about.

PS. Sorry for getting back so late on this, I'm busy on the weekends.