I just wanted to say this is a beauitful poem and very touching. i really like it a lot. keep writing because your very talented.

This is very touching I am very sorry to hear about your loss. The first stanza was the best and it really was brilliant however your last stanza really needs a bit of work, your ending it with tear to rhyme with tear is a little forced but i can see that its difficult to find anything to else to rhyme. You have great potential! Well Done!