It flowed and rhymed really well until the last line. Again didn't really rhyme with die. It was really short, but overall good.

"but if u look deep within"
Maybe you could write out the word you?

Wow amazing poem.. i lvoe ur poems. they r so great.. i like it.. i feel that wya tooo... ur so talented.. keep writing.. great job 5/5

take care and stay strong
angie