by Wings Of Flames Jun 27, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
She rose her bow to the world, |
by Drew Gold
Some of the rhymes seem a little contrived -- back rhyming with black. The rhyme format isnt really necessary. I like what you've set up but it doesnt seem to be executed as effectively as it could be. |
It's beautiful!!!! i love it soooo much |
Goody good good love. another wonderful poem with a great story. one of the things i like most about your work is that you use a huge range of words, instead of recycling them from other poems. I always find it hard to get out of that habit. i'm always trying to use new and interesting words and themes for my word. |