Holy.....This is awesome! I've never read anything like this from you, Mom! Absolutely brilliant! You know I love dark poetry, why have you been hiding this from me? I never knew you had it in you to write something like this, not that I ever doubted your talent, this just so isn't your style.
I flippin' love these lines:

"And as I walk with steps of doubt
I hear his voice in slumbered gloom"

"
As heathen creatures here are born
In Satan's sanction comes the kiss
Of pungent breaches and bloody thorns."

and finally this line:

"Among the undead's catacombs."

Love ya~Holly

This is a wicked poem. It reminds me of a song "Vampires Will Never Hurt You by My Chemical Romance". Very kool. "Amond the undead's catacombs" is a kewl line ;)

Wow!!! I felt like I was in the room waiting with him, fantastic write in every way, the flow was perfect, and visually my senses are reeling. Thanx for writing it. Tim

This poem is scary and lovely well written 5/5!

Awesome! I really like it, good work!

Once again speechless... your an exeltent poet

Fantabulous.... I love poetry and vampires, so when you combine the two so nicely, it makes me appreciate talent.... 5/5 keep it up!