Unseen Death

by LadyPearl   Jun 27, 2006


Please read, it's a bit long---

It was a strange combination
of love and a fatal reaction
It was a concealment for the face
a heart that didn't know it's place

There are consequences for every action
based upon every conviction
Not all of them turn out right
Most leaving the family in blight

A story of a family's tragic vacation
caused by a young girl's silent commotion
She hated her life, she hated her money
All she wanted was to be loved by many

For her birthday, she wanted a trip
Careful not to make her big plan slip
They reached there by plane, a quarter to eight
She set her mind on her date with fate

"I'm a bit tired, you guys go on ahead"
She watched them leave, just as she said
Night wandered in and covered the place
Cold eyes stared out from her face

She writes a brief note with her last breath
Words explaining the reasons for her death
All she wanted was love, not what money could buy
Now it's too late, she has said her good-bye

Into the sky, with her eyes closed tight
She lets go of her remaining life light
Fading...dying, her memories, her dreams
The night filled with her parent's scream

They found her note, then her withered body
Lying on the ground where everybody could see
They held each other, mourned and cried
Something inside each of them seemed to have died

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  • 18 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    That was very sad... Very sad indeed. I liked it, as i do all of your poems, and I don't think it was very long at all. I wrote a poem once that was six notbook pages long, front and back, but I'm crazy =D! Great job, again, 5/5.

    ravyn

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I really liked this one, it's sad, and so well written. I imagined everything in the poem, the girl, the family...

    This was my favorite part:

    Into the sky, with her eyes closed tight
    She lets go of her remaining life light
    Fading...dying, her memories, her dreams
    The night filled with her parent's scream

    Good job!

    XoXo
    Gaby

  • 18 years ago

    by X~Angie~X

    Very very sad.. :( it made me sad when i read it. its very deep and powerful.. but its good. u wrote it well. it has great rhythm.. word choice..adn flow.. great job.. keep writing
    take care and stay strong
    angie

  • 18 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Aww.. that was really sad. I loved the story you had going on and the meaning behind it that money cannot buy happiness. Great poem, the wording was really good, with some great descriptions and it flowed well. Great job 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by SaveMe?

    Awww thats so sad ='[
    very moving poem
    that was a great write and you are an amazing poet!
    i loved this story
    5/5
    keep up the good work
    lovelove
    Alice
    xxxxx