Great poem quite sad tho =[
i thikn this poem would be wonderfull if you carried it on a bit =]
i love the first line and the way you repeated it =]
great poem keep up the good work
5/5
lovelove
Alice
xxxxx

Woah gr8 poem. so much emotion and detail! 5/5

Wow i love it. its amazing. i like how u use the first line on all ur stanzas.. its cool. its a sad poem tho.. i can relate... keep writing u have lots of talent great job 5/5
take care
angie