One thing that you need to do, is write what you mean! Not like b/c write because.. It gets really confusing and I am sure more ppl would give the time to look at your poem.. That is the only problem i had about putting you first in my contest..

Rach

Not too keen on the use of poor English, poetry will not be taken seriously unless it is written seriously!
Emotional write, and moving. Not bad for a teen angst poem, but the spelling lets it down.