Not as good as the first one but it was still good! enough for a 5, once again it was deep with emotion and thats what keeps it as a 5. very good, i really dont know what else to say! 5/5

Not as good as the first one but it was still good! enough for a 5, once again it was deep with emotion and thats what keeps it as a 5. very good, i really dont know what else to say! 5/5

This poem is really good, I think I know what you mean. I loved the first stanza, it's so well written and I can relate to it.

Good job!

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Gaby

That last line was amazing. This ended the poem so well, because it was perfect. Exactly the right image to end it with. Wedding dress, I guessed it right! Woohoo!.. go me!.. Anyways, this was a fantastic follow to your first part. There were so many emotions, all mixed into these two poems. Hate, anger, sadness, pain. Well, all the negative emotions. Still, amazing stuff. It went from your dad being all loving and you wanted to be happy with him, then his fiance coming in and ruining everthing. Him avoiding you and stuff, then the wedding is coming up, and she's a wicked witch and you hate her, and now stuff is happening to you.. Wow, it's like something from a movie, but this time, it's for real. That is great, you brought this true story, and made it into something we can all feel. Your words gave us the emotions you had. Brilliant!.. This is by far, the best pieces you have written.

I really really like it I have the same feelings for my moms boyfriends. Excellnt it is really good there is so much emotion into one very long poem, but the last five minutes was totally worth it!

Please read forienger, and you pick the others!!! thanks!

Whoa! It was just as I expected. It was really good. And, so sad.

There were some parts again that didn't fit too well. But.. like I said in the other comment, I'm not too worried about that, cause there's so much emotion in these two poems. You and Jordan did a really good job! Keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Again, a powerful story, and so sorrowful that it had to suffer through such pained ending. I suppose it is all the counseling that I have been subjected to that would make me feel like I didn't like the way this poem went, but then again we can't engineer life that way since you said this was a true story. I guess I know that there is nothing glorious about suicide, and it never gives people a chance because you are already gone. I tried to end my life a number of times, and honestly people around me didn't understand why I would try or what was going through my head. I suppose I don't approve of giving up like that anymore, I have learned that it solves nothing at all. I heart cries for this girl who would end her life because she was so desperate and felt so lonely and felt no other way around leaving this world. I hurt knowing that people feel that way, that I felt that way, so this poem touched me and was rather close to my heart in that sense.

-Tainted

That is sad....i like it.....

Once again Im speechless---and once again amazing-you guys did a great job! 5/5...once again

What happened to jordan really? is she gone? just wondering im really sorry if she did me so sad

5/5... GREAT WORK BOTH OF YOU.. I loved it.. And loved how u started the poem and ended the poem with the same word!

~4ever

Same as my other comment. Check ove the grammar and you're set!

Beautifully done, it was sad, but very well done, keep it up
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