In the breeze

Well, i feel *really* inclined to return the favour for your peer editing on my poem, but like wip said...i am lurving this, man...i want to see it scripted out in golden ink and hanging from my bedroom wall

at MOST, what i could suggest is an annoying tn (technical note) that is: add an "and" to the semi-last line (i.e.
"AND skipping on a livewire") ...it would
add a little more flow, maybe

but SERIOUSLY...this poem is, as the youngsters say, 'teh sex' :P

I love the images you use here

"showering you with paper petals
falling from anime trees"

sooo beautiful, I can just picture it in my head, it's such a i can't even describe how it makes me feel lol

it's so short but it says so much
change nothing
add nothing
it's love all around in my eyes
wow i'm giving great advice and comments right :-)

the imagry is amazing, it's soft and flowing, I'm jealous, it's so much a love poem but not corny which I LOVE and it's so sad at the same time, you pulled it off and personally i neveer thought anyone would so props girl!

5/5 for sure

I LOVE IT!! It's the shortest poem that I've EVER fallen in love with! lol! 5/5
PV

*quiet giggle*...indeed

as i've said before, laura, dearest - i adore the gentle subtlety you've captured and of course WORSHIP teh reference to anime trees...'tis one of my faves and i demand it goes into your next chapbook! (unless...was this one included in the discotheque one? i shall have to double check)

keep submitting!

Hey guys...i'm not sure really where to put this poem...it's about first love and realizing it...it describes a situation actually, that is mostly true for one of my friends.