Like a Rose

I love the comparison of life to a rose. It was a clever concept, and you've written it beautifully.

"Provides pollen for the bees."

I would suggest dropping 'the' from that line, as it feels maybe one too many syllables, but that wouldn't make much difference.

I can't find fault other than that, and that's hardly a problem. Really, an excellent poem. x

I didn't particularly like this poem until the very last line. It was kind of like, oh cliche, boring, but the last sentence absolutly changed the entire poem for me. Great job!

Pretty kool simile. i like similes. well done! rock on.

Very nice, but your attempt to rhyme sweet and bees was a little off.

the imagry in this poem was fantastic. truely lovely, and the last stanza was my favorite. a perfect finish to a lovly poem

Ruby

Great way to compare life as a rose. Wonderful imagery, great write