I really liked the message in this poem, You're so talented, i love reading your work.

--Steph

Great job...I loved the beginning...when you describe the rose and then how you used it in life...Nice job...
Emma 5/5

Hmm...definitely interesting. Good flow, great rhyming. The only problem that I have is just the symbolism. You're making it sound as if the rose is either a symbol for happiness or sadness. What happened to the in between? Great job though.

5/5

joy*:.xx

WOW!!! Hunni i loved it, just loved it! it has a very very good point, I'm glad you wrote it b/c it is the one thing i have needed to read for awhile now...it was great!!

You did a good job using and comparing a rose as a symbol of how our life goes! nicely written! What you wrote is absolutely true! In every sunshine (good) there's a shadow that follows (bad)!

Great way to compare life as a rose. Wonderful imagery, great write

Very nice, but your attempt to rhyme sweet and bees was a little off.

the imagry in this poem was fantastic. truely lovely, and the last stanza was my favorite. a perfect finish to a lovly poem

Ruby

Pretty kool simile. i like similes. well done! rock on.

I didn't particularly like this poem until the very last line. It was kind of like, oh cliche, boring, but the last sentence absolutly changed the entire poem for me. Great job!

I love the comparison of life to a rose. It was a clever concept, and you've written it beautifully.

"Provides pollen for the bees."

I would suggest dropping 'the' from that line, as it feels maybe one too many syllables, but that wouldn't make much difference.

I can't find fault other than that, and that's hardly a problem. Really, an excellent poem. x