Awww...This Poems So Sad/Yet Another Amazing One By You...Your Amazing Poet And Your Work Is Beautiful Don't Let Anyone Tell You Other Wise...This Was My Favorite Stanza:
You begin to close your eyes,
with one last tear.
You've had so many trys,
but now death is near.

I Love It....5/5 I Enjoy Reading Yours Keep Them Up
Love,
Steph*xthesetearsfalldownlikerainx*

This is a good poem, though I think you meant "you're" instead of "your", in some lines, it happens to me all the time.

*Your depressed, and your drunk.*

My favorite stanza was the third one, specially the line: "You wonder why you live". I think I can relate to that.

Good job!

XoXo
Gaby

Wow.. I think you write some of the best poems i have seen on this site..

Keep writing i love this poem!

Rach

Meaningful, heart felt, beautiful. You write some of the most amazing poetry I've ever seen. I can read your poems a thousand times, but never will i get bored of them. Most of them are so amazing to me because I know what it's like. Being drunk, being high, feeling like nothing, being in love...Kepp writing, forever and always. You'll go amazingly far with your poetry.

Love Always-Casey J

Hey, i LOVE all the poems you write they're great but sad....happy 4th of july.dont do nuttin dumb ur like a brother to me and i dont wanna loose you over........sumthin like that k luv ya bunches-hugs n kisses

FOOL!! - Do you realise the havok and evils you have unleashed!?!?! You made a spelling error, it's you're* not your. :)
Anywho, good poem, you do have a wee bit of drinking habit laddie boy. But it's better than curling up into a ball every night and well wishing you had alcohol like I do.

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Amazing, loved it.

Awwwwww this is so sad....but i really like it...good job!