Extremely well put together. I could feel your emotions which is a plus. The rhyming aspects were superb... 5 stars. Hope, if this poem has some validity to it, everything works out for you.

Charles-"In everything I am an outsider"-H.P. Lovecraft

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Very well written woith some powerful expression. the content is clearly presented and easy to read. good peice

5/5

Great job.