Very nice poem. Almost a small tale, loved the ending...4.0, due to the fact that in the middle I became confused with what you were saying but other than that you have At talent and I wish to see more of it in the future.

charles "In everything I am an outsider"-H.P. Lovecraft.

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I agree with Charles it is lyke a small tale n did get some what comfuzin in the middle but far from that,it wus a nice poem B)

Hey, i really liked this, agree with both other comments before, it created great images in my mind! i would give atleast 4, defs shd be higher than 3. good work,

Loved loved loved your poem. i could picture everything that was going on in my head. awesome. i like the detail to it. i wouldnt' change a thing!