Distorted Thoughts

by Tainted Beauty   Jul 2, 2006


Rip my heart out of my chest,
I will bleed your lies,
Ive loved you now, forever,
This is no time for good bye,

Tear apart my skin,
A desperate plea in haste,
I will stare back you,
A gaze of disgusted hate,

Tear me down,
Take me off my throne,
Youre blinding me,
With the worst pain Ive ever known,

Stare me down,
Watch your gaze cut through me,
Try to silence me,
But I will not go quietly,

You promised me!
Youre breaking me down,
Ripping out my soul,
And pounding it on the ground,

Care for me,
Like I know in your heart, you would,
Tell me you love me,
Like youve always wished you could.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Ye Seul

    Awesome!! this poem is great and the rhymes flowed really well!! i like the words you used for description! keep it up!! 5/5!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow.. i love this poem. It's so well written. My absolute favorite stanza was:
    Tear apart my skin,
    A desperate plea in haste,
    I will stare back you,
    A gaze of disgusted hate,
    I loved that stanza for some reason, it flowed perfectly and the rhyming was pure flawless, all throughout the poem. Great job on this! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    Great poem-really dark and deep. Extremely well written. I love this stanza:

    ''Tear apart my skin,
    A desperate plea in haste,
    I will stare back you,
    A gaze of disgusted hate,''

    I like the rhyme that you added into the poem-It wasnt overdone or forced at all----Great write-----Definately a 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by XXTruthSeekerXX

    Nice job, you can still add more imagery to relate to the title more

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Steph -- this is really good! I liked it.. the rhymes and rhythm all flowed really smoothly, and it was easy to comprehend. I think it was great!
    Keep it up! =D
    5/5

    **Samantha Hollywood

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