Wow. This was a really sad/haunting poem.

Can you here the crying
Or is it the tears inside your head
Are you feeling proud
Now that all innocence is dead
[I loved that stanza. Thought you wrote that really well.]
Your flow and rhyming were pretty good. Keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Wonderfully written, I only have one part I would like to comment on
[Cuts upon the feet of humanity
Treading on broken glass
So you wanted this humanity
All you had to do was ask]
Mabey its just me but the double use of the same word sorta threw me off, other than thant it was A great poem with pictures painted well in the mind of your reader.

The demons are rushing forward
For yet another taste of flesh
Your tears stain your pretty face
Your bloods never been as fresh

wow haunting 5/5. amazing babe i love it