Hey i like this, short but to the point. I have talked to alot of people that do that, and they all say they used it as therapy.

Powerful. good use of repitition.

I think that there should have been about five more different lines, maybe at the end.. then again, maybe not. The rhyme structure was different from any I had ever seen before, but I still liked it.
Take care.

//T.L.//

Short, but once again very good. You really get your point across. The rhyme scheme is great.