Wow this is rly sad but then again i like sad poems so this was rly rly good 5/5 keep up the good work

This is a great poem. I'm guessing that this is not your experience, and yet your descriptions are really good, I really imagined the whole story. I also liked the message: "What good has come from this?". So true!!!

Great job!

XoXo
Gaby

That's good piece of work right here,,,excellent story telling,,,u make the reader feel as if though you were there holding the gun.,,,,plus it has got a nice message to it,,,,,keep up the good work

This gave me CHILLS...very realistic.

Flow was okay, work on maintaining a syllable count that's not both crazy long and crazy short in one stanza. (Here's a hint, read it out loud, and eliminate any words that sound out of place.)

Great write.

5/5

joy*:.xx

I liked this. Speshly the ending.

I REALLY liked the 3rd stanza. I thought it was great!! You've done an amazing job on this one! Keep it up!! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Great job you are doing great.....keep up the good work....5/5

Steph-- great!! This was really detailed which made it interesting and attention grabbing. I loved it. I also really liked some of your rhymes - they were complex, not so simple. It was great. =D
5/5

**Samantha Hollywood

A very strong poem that gets your attention easily. great job.

Well, this one made me cry..mainly b/c both of my cousins are gone fighting in this war, and it breaks my heart just thinking about what could happen to them..but i loved it you're emotions really came through, it flowed and rhymed very well..great job!

I love it! The imagery in it is amazing and it seems so realistic-The flow is flawless. Great write----very unique----5/5

This was a wonderful poem. It brought to life the tragedy of a war. You gave us the perspective of a soldier and what they go through. Eventually you turn around and the message is clear, war is stupid. Really good job on this poem.

Wow. you've portrayed what goes on in so many minds because of these hopesles wars.

great writing

peace
shobhana

Wow! that was so sad, it was awesomely written, with deep emotions and great imagery, keep writing
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A great poem, that displyas the true feelings of the men at war and brings together, nicely, the bitter regret of war. Beautiful poetry.

Peace. [Sole]

Wow.. i love this another really great one.. is it about the pointless war in iraq.. lol bush stinks.. .. that is unless you like him.. then ill have to downrate you.. lol JKJKJK

but still really great poem!